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GOAL

I want to MVP Act 1 at reasonable page count with no fat.

I may do drastic things, like

Remove Brida.

Remove Scene with Mick robbing as a child.

Could probably do setting up Johanna and Mary when Will visits Bridgets house.

Start the Triangle further Along…she meet Mick but is already involved (although this is a huge change)

Approach

I’ve tagged each scene:

#R Ready to write

#Q Some blocker or questions I need to answer before I write.

#D I can largely use these scenes, as is.

NOTE: I’ve generally put the key questions/blockers as notes on the cards, just below Synopses.

Starting with triangle scenes.

Triangle structure is in 3 Parts. (In outline panel you can filter by colour, character.)

Will courting

Mick courting

Resolution.

I think the “Will scenes” are ready or close to ready, but have a read through to refresh yourself.

Then for other triangle scenes and the “Merge” scenes.

Settle on the markup + clean up synopsis

Make sure you have the key beats for each. (can edit in the card view)

Have a rough page count for those scenes.

Drag the scenes in, one by one, to a new doc..to get a final page count.

When you’re finished read out loud or get a reader app that assigns OSX voices. (this TODO is in osx reminders app)

CURRENT ISSUES/IDEAS/KEY DECISIONS

Theres a lot of setup in pink “Trapped cursed home” section. Work out the key ideas and how to get them across quickly

Need to clarify each parents attitude to “letting go” of their girl and the attitude to the 2 suiters.

If the overprotection is a key point - I need a cathartic way of her breaking free - Maybe finding her drunk causes a face off between mother & father.

The Shebeen scenes are a little messy atm: for example ("THE SESSION") - Will enters and mick Leaves. This is perhaps doing too much. Also might make the night with Mick less special. Might make Mick seem too volatile at this point.

There was a “coming out with Mick” Sheebeen/Ceili scene too. Just check this is gone.

Theres also “seeing her double” in "DANCE 2" (its in the merge/chop up section)

The kissing cousin Beat is in there, which also taints the night. (not sure where this could go..he could just come to the window)

I do like the idea of showing how Mick is received in the shebeen (Friendly “us” artists) with how Will is (formal..”Them”).

Mick makes Amends twice. Once after his dad steals eggs and once after Bridget's chickens are killed. This is a little redundant but perhaps ok for now.

The scene where Bridget comes back late and drunk, is this after she visits the mound/or visits Sheebeen with will? Doesnt matter massively.

Do Mick and Will meet anywhere (apart from protection)? (I think I’ll take Will out of the first date with Mick...“THE SESSION”)

Choose where rabbit Reveal goes (going to remove it from donkey scene.).

I want the Rabbit serve as a “Reveal destiny” moment.Rabbit, have mick pass Bridget the rabbit at the hurling match. Could have them just talk about in one of the later scenes...by the lake. Remember the Rabit is dead when she finds Mick sleeping rough "FOUND YOU" ..Bridget- ”It was you I gave the rabbit to”. Mick indicates he has never forgotten the kindess.

Where to put Claire reveal

Claire could just be on the street, and Mick ignores her...after the “Protection” beat. (although this is redundant with Funeral)

Claire show up at the Hurling?

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